点评作文：Animals Are Our Friends

Now, let's imagine two pictures. One is a square of grass, with a little girl and a little pigeon on it. The sun is shining on them. They are playing together happily. The pigeon is flying around the girl. They are really having a good time. Then let's have a look at a picture in Australia. A family of kangaroo are jumping on savanna. Suddenly, one of the greedy hunters on the savanna shot a kangaroo. At that time, it fell down to the ground immediately. How terrible this is! It's too tragic! So I think that, as human beings, we have done so much destruction to animals. If you walk on a street of a city, from the windows of shops on both sides of the street, you can see that a lot of animal fur has been made into clothes for us to wear. To expand our space of living, we cut down a lot of rain forests in order to get more fertile farmland. But this has caused a great number of animals lose their lives, many of them have no place to live in, no place to look for food. Thirdly, let's have a look at what's on our tables. We eat a lot of animals, you know, they are delicious. This is too tragic' We eat them just for the purpose of filling up our own stomach. Fourthly, I think that protecting animals is what we should do at the moment. This has made our food chain unbalanced. We kill these animals to make more money for our own benefits. This is all wrong! This is a wrong idea!

　　Many people nowadays desire to have a more peaceful world in which man and animals are friends. Having this dream, we should make a good effort to make this dream come true; we should educate people and let them realize that protecting animals and becoming animals' friends is a very good idea; we should improve our law because law controls one's action, so that less people will kill animals. As middle school students, we should try to influence the others. Let us all take a right attitude towards protecting animals. I'm sure that in the future, in the square mentioned above, there will be more children and grown-ups playing there, more lovely pigeons flying around them. Oh, I hope, I wish our world would be as happy as that!

　　点评：

　　The writer of this speech note is a little girl of Grade Two. It's not easy for her to give this speech after a preparation of twenty minutes. Using very simple language, she, who loves animals and wants to help them, manages to make her opinion quite plain. The two pictures she imagines have printed in our minds, which make us aware of what we have done and what we should do to animals. In all it is a good speech note.