Taking Photos

I spent a very instructive weekend， I should say. Zhang Weijiang and I went to Jinan Park to practise taking photos. We are both the members of the photography group. To take some photos is not a difficult job， but if you want to take some good or artistic photos， it is much more difficult. You must study. Of course， you can't only study the knowledge in the book， but you ought to study the skill in practice. You must pay attention to the distance， diaphragm （光圈） and velocity [exposure （曝光时间）] （1） when you are taking photos. How to find a good view to form a good picture may be the most important. I am just a learner. In the past， I did not like to take photos very much， but as soon as I took the camera， I was attracted by it. My father likes taking photos too. He is not a professional cameraman， but he is good at taking photos. I became his model when I was only 56 days old！ Now， there are two photography fans in my family.

　　In the park， so many people asked me to take photos for them. One of them was a gardener. He was in his dirty clothes with mud on his face， but he looked quite honest and kind. I took a photo of him when he was working. The others were lovely children playing happily. Their parents thanked me for taking pictures of them. I felt slightly [a little] （2） proud.

　　I like taking photos. It can keep the wonderful views or exciting moments for ever. When I am old， I will look at these photos again. They will remind me of the things that have passed. I wish [hope] （3）everyone will enjoy taking photos.

　　上海市第三女子中学高二（1）班 陆欣玥

　　评 语

　　文章写得简洁活泼，很有生活气息。特别是能有感而发地进行议论，使文章更为动人。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）velocity是指 rate of movement.曝光时间或曝光速度可用exposure.

　　（2）根据上下文，有肯定的语气，用a little较好。

　　（3）从句用一般将来时will enjoy，主句不能用wish.wish后接从句，要用虚拟语气。根据上下文，改为hope较好。