范文:Traffic Jams in Shanghai

「要求」

　　要求：随着社会经济的发展，上海作为中国的大都市，其交通状况不太令人满意，如不及时有效的解决，则会成为制约其发展的“瓶颈”。请你根据你的了解，谈一下关于上海交通阻塞的情况。

　　「范文」

　　Traffic Jams in Shanghai

　　For the past ten years traffic jams in Shanghai have become more and more serious. There are many reasons for it but in general they come down to three main causes.

　　First， with the rapid development of economy in Shanghai， too many traffic tools are brought into use. Next， the traffic system in Shanghai was established mainly in the 1940's. The roads are so narrow that they can't bear such heavy traffic. The final reason is that the population of Shanghai has been increasing too fast. So， it is clear that the traffic system in Shanghai must be reorganized as soon as possible.

　　「评语」

　　本段第一句为主题引入句，提出上海交通阻塞的严重性。第二句为主题句，指出阻塞有三个主要原因。然后明确阐述原因所在。最后，作者没有作为一个客观者总结其原因，而是对主题加以评述，表达自己的观点，以引起读者思考。

　　少以旁观者的身份表达自己的观点，要多用自己的声音说话。