在海里游泳

「内容提示」

　　炎热的夏天，你去青岛旅行。一天下午，你去海滨避暑，第一次在海水里游泳。看到大浪，听到涛声，起初你有些害怕。但当看见一个弱小的男孩向大海游去时，你感到害臊。受到小男孩的鼓舞，你向前游去，经受了狂涛大浪的洗礼。

　　「作文示范」

　　Swimming in the Sea

　　陈宏明

　　It was in hot summer that I took a trip to Qingdao， a port city in Shandong Province， One afternoon， I decided to go to the seaside to get relief ① from the heat. For the first time in my life， I swam in the sea.

　　At first， I was worried because though I was not a bad swimmer in the swimming pool， the sea was different. The waves coming one after another to the shore made a great noise and I thought they were going to swallow me up. I was terrified. Cautiously ② and slowly， I went close to the water. How cold it was！ I was just about to give it up when I suddenly caught sight of a small boy who was about a head shorter than me. Weak as he seemed， he went straight into the sea without hesitation. I felt a little ashamed.“What a timid ③ girl I am！”I said to myself.

　　Encouraged by his bravery ④， I continued advancing. Soon all of my body was covered by water. Before I got ready for a dive， a wave came over. It struck my face heavily and the water went into my eyes， nose and mouth. How bitter and salty it tasted！ But I was not discouraged at all. I wiped off the water on my face， took a deep breath， and began swimming happily.

　　The waves became larger and larger， as if the sea was angry with me. When I saw a wave in the distance， I would hold my breath， and just before it came to where I was， I jumped up and easily kept myself from it. How exciting！ I was just like lying on the clouds！

　　All that afternoon， I swam and jumped and had a very good time. When finally I had to leave， I took a last look at the sea. The waves were still beating the shore， but I was no longer frightened. “I must thank that little boy，”I said to myself.“It was he who gave me the courage.”

　　「词语解释」

　　①relief [ri'li：f] n. 减轻；解除

　　②cautiously ['k&：M+sli] ad. 谨慎地；细心地

　　③timid ['timid] a. 胆怯的；缺乏自信心的

　　④bravery ['breiv+ri] n. 勇敢；大胆

　　「写法指要」

　　1）本文作者写了她第一次在海里游泳的情况。但是，她主要不是叙述自己如何游泳，而是描写她由胆怯到勇敢，甚至敢于与惊涛骇浪争高下的转变过程。

　　2）作者在文中使用了拟人和明喻两种修辞格：前者如“…swallow me up…。”和“…as if the sea was angry with me…。”，后者如“It was just like lying on the clouds.”。此外，有些句型如“… be just about to do…when…。”，“Weak as he seemed…。”用得很好，值得借鉴。