My Little Watermelon

Mon，Aug. 8

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　　There is a small garden behind our house. Last spring weplanted some water melons there. We hoped they would bear （结果）。 Every day we went to water them. When summer came， we were happy to see they grew a little faster. Then the flowers were blooming. What beautiful the flowers！ [How beautiful the flowers were！]（2） We went to see them more often. Then autumn came. Can you imagine what we saw there one day？ A little watermelon like a ping-pong ball！ Little as it was， we liked it very much because it was the fruit of our hard work. I thought it might enter“The Guinness（吉尼斯）World Records”for its small size！

　　陕西省长安205研究所学校高三（1）班 李 悦

　　评 语

　　这两篇日记充分体现了日记的特点：语言生动、活泼，内容写自己的心里话，读来十分有趣，某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）用形容词批评、赞扬、对某人行为下评论时常用句型it is +形容词+ of +行为人+ to do.其中用介词of，不能用for.文中的it是形式宾语，也需遵守这一规则。这样的形容词常用的是：brave， careless， clever， foolish， good， （un）kind， polite， right， wrong， rude， （un）selfish， silly 等。

　　（2）这句感叹句用错了。应该用“what +名词”或者“How +形容词+主语+其他”。