Departure

「要求」

　　描写一个场面，表现离别的情况。要求：出场人物至少三个，有人物的心理，语言及动作描写。有适当景物描写作为背景。字数不限。

　　「范文」

　　Departure

　　I was ready to leave for Beijing after the winter vacation. Looking out of the window of the train， I saw my parents still standing on the platform.

　　“Write to us as soon as you arrive，”Father said，“Be sure to take good care of yourself.”He is usually quite solemn， but at that time， he looked very gentle and kind.

　　Mother was standing a little behind father. When our eyes met， she smiled a bit. Through her smile， I could see something else.

　　It was cold. Snow covered the edge of the platform. From time to time， the wind lifted my mother's gray hair.

　　“Ma”， I leaned out of the window， trying to say something to comfort her and change the atmosphere a little， but I failed. I just didn't know what to say. Suddenly the bell rang.

　　“Good-bye！”　 I finally cried out.

　　“Good-bye！” Father waved to me. Mother took a few steps forward as if to say something， but she only looked at me.

　　So difficult to keep back the tears.

　　The train whistled， and began to gather speed.

　　Don't hesitate to say “love” to your parents.

　　「评语」

　　这是一篇优秀习作，选材精当，描写到位，文字简洁，很好地起到了抒情达意的作用。也许有亲身体会的关系，读来真切动人。