Go Your Own Way

It's one of my favourite things to spend some leisure time enjoying the American TV play——Growing Pains（《成长的烦恼》）。I really appreciate the programme， for it's the most humorous TV play for us teenagers that I've ever watched. Apart from hearty laughters[laughter]（1），it brings me some deep thoughts on life as well.

　　The section shown last night told us an interesting story： Card， a girl-student of fifteen， was often made fun of by her naughty elder brother Mike. He kept saying that she was an ugly girl. How could a girl bear such cruel things at all？ Therefore， she made a bold decision to have her face beautified by operation！ One day， accompanied by Mike， Card went to the hospital for her operation. At the critical moment， her parents rushed into the waiting room trying to stop her from doing silly things. To their great surprise， she herself had already changed her mind. Why？ Because just now Mike told her that she did look pretty. It was only a joke when he had said that she was ugly！

　　My God！ Just see how one's words would have effects on others' deeds！ Surely， we live in a world of love and beauty， and we'd like to be appreciated by all other people. But we should realize that everyone has his own opinion of beauty and moral （道义上的）standards. That is to say， it's quite impossible and [there is] （2） no need either to satisfy everybody. So， whether we are good or not in others' eyes isn't so important as to change our former determination （决心） all at once！ Only to keep ourselves confident [by keeping self-confident ]（3 ） can we surely strengthen the courage in us. Confidence in ourselves will offer us enough power to overcome any difficulty whenever and wherever we run across [it] （4）。

　　In daily life， we are sometimes influenced by others' words， which is quite natural. But I can't understand why some people always feel obliged to shape themselves to others' opinions. They will first think of what others might say before they do anythingelse.Why not live a relaxed life？As long as you behave naturally and frankly（坦率地），not pretending to do anything that you actually don't like to do but to please others， you are sure to win what you long for！ So，I always believe in such a saying：“Go straight your own way without caring what others say behind！”

　　山东省实验中学高二（4）班 赵婧

　　评 语

　　就如何对待别人的意见，走自己的路，作者发表了自己的观点。文章以电视剧《成长的烦恼》中的一个情节作为例子，力图证明自己观点的正确性，由于该剧在同龄人中收视率较高，因此，颇能引起共鸣。这也是作者在选材展开议论时的聪明之处。

　　文章的语句较为流畅，句型长短变化有致，词语运用也较老练。文中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）laughter是不可数名词，故改之。

　　（2） no need是名词性结构，与前面带有形式主语 it的“主—系—表”结构并列是错误的，需加上there is.

　　（3）不定式位于句首作状语时，一般表示目的，而这里上下文显然不通，不能把 keep ourselves confident作为句子谓语的目的状语，而只能表示方式，故改之。

　　（4） whnever and wherever引导的是状语从句， run across 的宾语不能丢。