Loveof Life

Tan Yanxi is one of my good friends. I met her four years ago. The weather of that day was rather bad. It was cold and raining hard. I was also sad that day because I had just failed in my English exam.

　　I walked slowly on my way home with a heavy heart. Occasionally I looked up and suddenly saw a girl walking in the rain. I saw clearly that she was a lame [lame] （1）！ She walked with difficulty in the rain， without an umbrella， and was wet all over. Suddenly she stopped. There was a puddle （水坑） in front of her. I went to her at once and said， “Hi！ Let me help you.” She looked up. I saw the raindrop [raindrops] （2） running down from （3） her face. Her bright eyes told me that she was very surprised. After a few seconds she gave me a friendly smile and said， “Thank you！” I found some bricks and put them in the puddle， and then supported her to cross it. I wanted to lend her my umbrella but she declined （谢绝）。 She only gave me another smile before we parted.

　　In this way we became friends， and close friends. Later I learned that when she was ten years old， she met an accident， which made her a lame [lame] （4）。 I was very sorry to hear that， but she smiled again. “Although I am a lame [lame] （5）， I don't feel sad. I love life. Have you read the book Love of Life？ It was written by Jack London. I like it very much.When I am in difficulty， I always say to myself， 'Believe yourself！ And don't give up！’ So I always try my best to do everything I want to do.” When I heard these words， I felt she was so charming， though she was not a beautiful girl.

　　From her I have learned a lot. I have come to understand better that one lives to fight difficulties and not to fear them.

　　北京市海淀区铁道附中高三（6）班 杨晓健

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　　这篇文章是作者专门为好友18岁生日而写的。用英语作作文作为生日礼物很有意义。交友是学生生活的重要方面。追求志同道合、兴趣相投固然必要，但若能从朋友身上学到闪光的东西，从而激励自己的生活和学习，就更为可贵。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）、（4）、（5）lame是形容词或动词，名词应该用。cripple.

　　（2）the raindrop特指某一滴雨水，或一种雨水，这里显然不妥，故改之。

　　（3）down可作介词，表示“沿着……”，from是多余的。