Friend as Well as Teacher

Last term a Canadian teacher came to our school. She was a young lady with blue eyes and golden hair. From the very first sight at the instant I met her in the school， her kind and lovely appearance， especially the pleasant smile gave me a deep impression. [What impressed me most when I met her the first time was her lovely and pleasant smile.]（1）

　　She gave us lessons in English conversation. In her first class， she said to us，“Don't address me as'teacher’or 'Miss’。 Just call me Christian.”This immediately shortened the distance between us. We all regarded her as our good friend. When we met in[on]（2）the campus， we smiled and said “Hi”。

　　Christian had a strange[unique（独特的）]（3）way of making her classes lively and interesting. The lessons she taught were not easily forgotten. We learned everything with a light heart. Once in a conversation class， she came into the classroom wearing so many clothes which seemed to me that[that it looked as if]（4）she had just come back from the Antarctica. With a smile on her face， she pointed at her thick overcoat and said something about it. After that， she zipped（拉拉链）the overcoat open and revealed（露出）a pullover， then a sportswear…As she took her clothes off， she taught us their different names and uses. When the bell rang， she pointed to the big pile of clothes and asked， “Do you remember what they are called in English and what their uses are？”We laughed and said，“Yes， we remember them clearly.”Hearing this， she smiled satisfactorily. Her vivid way of teaching showed us that we should do everything creatively.

　　After class Christian often chated[chatted]（5）with us. One day， when I asked her if she was homesick， she said， “Yes， I miss my family very much， especially during the nights when I'm alone. But when I'm with you during the daytime， I always feel happy and gay. I like all of you so much.”I was so moved by her words that I felt I had a lot of things to tell her， but my English was not good enough. I only said，“I like you， too.”At that time， however， language was not important， I think. There couldn't be a barrier（障碍）to the true friendship.

　　Christian， my good teacher and close friend， I will never forget your pleasant smile in my life.

　　北京师大附中高二（5）班 宋洁云

　　评 语

　　来我国中学任教的外籍教师越来越多。在教学过程中，他们与中国学生结下了深厚的友谊。这篇文章就从几个侧面反映了这一点。文章从动态角度对外籍教师作了描述，尤其是对外籍教师独特的教学法的描写很出色。同时，文章在“既是教师又是朋友”上下了功夫，读后让人也颇有同感。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）原文松散，有的地方用词不当，改后保持作者原意，又突出重点。

　　（2）campus前介词一般习惯用on.

　　（3）strange给人有“难以理解”的感觉。改为unique，表现出外籍教师独特新颖的教学方法。

　　（4）原句有语法错误。so…要和that…呼应。seemed to me…前少了形式主语it，而且这个结构不如用it looked as if更传神达意，故改之。

　　（5）chat是重读闭音节结尾的规则动词，加-ed时，t要双写。碰到这种语法现象，学生很容易粗心犯错误，必须特别注意，养成习惯。