What I Have Learned from Andy

September 27th is Andy's birthday. Many of his songs are being broadcast on that day.

　　Andy's Chinese name is Liu Dehua（刘德华）。 His parents are peasants. They have six children. Andy is the fourth and also the first boy. Andy spent his childhood in the countryside. They were very poor， so Andy left school. He went out to earn money. Andy bore hardships and led a plaining [plain] （1） life.

　　In the past， I didn't like Andy at all. I thought he was like the other star singers who didn't have much to learn or admire [to be learned from or admired for] （2）。 All their success only depended on their handsome appearances. When Andy said that he wanted to become a singer， many people laughed at him. So did I. I thought he pretended to be a genius （天才） but he sang terribly.

　　Now several years have passed. Andy is more than thirty. He isn't young. Many young singers are much more handsome than Andy. But Andy has achieved great success. He sings more and more wonderfully.

　　Many people told me that they disliked Andy. If you listen to the songs “The Dream That I'm Dreaming Of” and “The Days When We Walked Together”， you will surely be deeply moved. If you listen to the song which was written by Andy himself “Mum's Face”， you will find Andy's Chinese is very good. If you comprehend （理解） Andy with your heart， you will find Andy's of merits （优点）。

　　Surely Andy's songs aren't perfect， but Andy himself is respectable. In spite of Andy's great success， I won't forget the first film in which Andy acted for only five minutes. I won't forget the first song Andy sang was very terrible.

　　From Andy， I have learned a lot. I know how to make my life better with my efforts. I know if I want to be successful， I must work hard and I needn't care too much about what others say.

　　上海市第三女子中学高一（1）班 喻凌枫

　　评 语

　　本文用时间顺序法介绍了歌星刘德华并试图说明自己从刘德华身上学到了什么，就语言而言，文笔流畅，语句老练，但对文章标题指出的主题似乎展开不够。文章中某些语言上的不足之外点评修改如下：

　　（1）“朴素的生活”应该是 plain life.

　　（2）根据上下文作者似乎是想说“这些歌星没有多少值得他人学习和羡慕”，因此learn 和admire要改成被动态，且加上合适的介词。