Living Forever

Bad news has come these days[came that]（1） Chen Jingrun （陈景润），one of the greatest Chinese mathematicians died on March，19. It is a great loss to us all. The contribution he made makes[The contributions he made to mathematics make]（2） us think of him as a VIP and he will live in our minds forev-er.

　　When I was a child of seven， one year after I had enteredprimary school， I became interested in mathematics. I read quite a number of books on maths and soon became one of the top students in class. At that time， I regarded Professor Hua Luogeng（华罗庚）as the greatest mathematician ever in the world. But it had not been long before the bad news came： Professor Hua Luogeng died. I clearly remember that it was in 1985. Then a new name came up. It was Chen Jingrun. He won world fame because he made great contribution [contributions] （3） to solving the “Supposition of Godbarh” . He was so dedicated （献身） that he kept himself in the room for one month or even more in order to verify （证明） the abstract fact. I was deeply impressed by him and I believed that he was second only to Hua Luogeng. From then on， I determined to learn from them and decided that whenever I did anything [whatever I did] （4）， I should try my best to do it well. It has been my personal belief up to the present.

　　It is a fact that Mr Chen left us. I think that many peopleare in deep sorrow now. And many people are working on the unsolved problem continuously. I hope to be one of them. The example that the great mathematician set to us will inspire （鼓励） us to make greater efforts. I wish that Mr Chen could have a peaceful rest since the things he cared for will be continued by us.

　　上海市大同中学高三（5）班 徐天

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　　徐天同学自小酷爱数学，为失去心中的偶像——大数学家陈景润而悲痛，同时又为他的精神所激励，立志更勤奋学心，像陈景润一样为科学作出贡献。他的这篇作文告诉我们：如果我们关心时事，有感而发，就能写出好文章。文中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）原文时间状语these days不妥，时态也不必用现在完成时。

　　（2）、（3）contribution 表示“作出的贡献”时，用复数为好。

　　（4）原文读起来有中国式英语之嫌，故改之。

　　（5）文章结束部分略有删节和改动。