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One of the most talked [talked-about]（1） topics of the town is the laid-off （下岗的） workers and re-employment （再就业） . Take Shanghai for example. It is estimated that there was about 7% of the population [who] （2） lost jobs in 1997. And the number is still increasing. This phenomenon （现象） has caught greatsocial attention.

　　Then， why did so many workers lose their jobs？ I think， there are several reasons. First ， with the development of science and technology， modern machines have replaced some unskilled workers. So those workers have to lay-off [to be laid off] （3）。 Second， with the industrial restructuring and economic development across China， China needs not those unskilled workers but those high qualified workers. So those workers with lower qualifications have to lay-off [to be laid off] （4 ） . Third， with a great population， the competition among the people is heated and as a result， some of them will be out of jobs.

　　However， every coin has its two sides. The phenomenon of laid-off workers is no exception. This phenomenon has its own advantage and disadvantage. For one thing， the large number of laid-off workers influence [affects]（5）the social stability. Some poverty-stricken （6） laid-offs have to rob or steal in order to support themselves or their children to continue their studies. On the other hand， however， a large number of laid-offs help China with development. In order to be employed again， some laid-offs exert efforts （尽力） to study and compete with those employed， and the latter have to work harder for fear of losing their jobs. All those make more material value （7） and thus push the society to develop forward.

　　Yes， being out of job doesn't mean no job. The governmenthas made many efforts to solve this problem；re-employment project is one of them.The government has built up many special schools to retrain the laid-offs so as to help them find new jobs which they are up to.So I think， with the re-employment project，the problem of laid-off workers will be solved.

　　Finally，I would like to say：“Don't lose heart， laid-offs.The fate is grasped（8） in your own hands！”

　　by Zhang Jie Shanghai No. 1 Normal School

　　评 语

　　文章的结构基本上体现了英语议论文的特征，先提出论点：如何解决下岗再就业问题，再进行推理，最后提出自己的看法。尽管文中的有些观点还需要进一步推敲，但作者关注社会热点，能用英语发表看法是值得鼓励的。文中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）不及物动词talk这里作定语，加上about与被修饰语topics之间的动宾关系就成立了。

　　（2）不少同学很容易写出“There be+主语+动词”这样的错句，用 There be句型，也就是已经用 be作了谓语，后面再出现动词，要么用非谓语形式，要么用从句，请比较：

　　There are many students in the classroom.

　　There are many students reading in the classroom.

　　There are many students who like to read in the classroom.

　　There are many students like to read in the classroom.（误）

　　还有一种方法，那就是干脆去掉There be：

　　Many students like to read in the classroom.

　　（3）、（4）这里都应该用被动式。

　　（5）消极影响可用 affect.influence表示对宾语施加了某种影响，而对其发生了作用，如：

　　Don't let me influence your decision.

　　（6）用词太重。

　　（7）含义不清。

　　（8）去掉更简洁、有力。