Our Good Friend——Sunrise

Now we all have a good friend. Do you know “who” is it [it is] （1）？ It's the English newspaper of our school——“Sunrise”。 From it we can read many good compositions， poems， stories and learn a lot of English knowledge.

　　Our teachers often tell us to read more， write more and practise more in order to learn English well. With the teachers' help， we often write some compositions in English. To our enjoyment， we have “Sunrise” now， and some of our good English compositions can possibly （2） be carried （登载） in it. This has greatly encouraged us and helped us to improve our English. Since “Sunrise” was started last term， many students have showed great interest in English， especially in English writing. “Sunrise” has become our own English garden. We read it， care for it and develop it， treating it as our good friend.

　　We are thankful to our English teachers for their unselfish and hard work， especially to Mr Xie. He spent a lot of his spare time working on the paper. He went over the drafts （草稿）， edited （编排） the articles and so on. He posted and recommended （推荐）“Sunrise” to national or provincial English newspapers and magazines. Now some English experts and professors think highly of it， congratulating it [and have congratulated us on it] （3） . Several best articles of “Sunrise” have been chosen to bepublished in their English newspapers and magazines.

　　I wish“Sunrise” could rise higher and higher. I'll keep on practising writing and reading. “Sunrise” will be my good friend for ever.

　　江西省宁冈县宁冈中学高二（4）班 黄霞

　　评 语

　　江西省宁冈县宁冈中学自办的英文小报Sunrise在该校英语学习中发挥了巨大的作用。受到了学生们的欢迎。本文作者用热烈的笔调介绍了这份英文小报，同时表达了对办报教师的感激之情。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）who 引导的是宾语从句，it指前面的 a good friend，应该作主语，所以要用陈述语序。

　　（2）possibly语义与can重复，可删去。

　　（3）应用 congratulate sb.on sth.，而且，由于这里congratulate的含义也较重要，应该与 think highly of并列用作第二谓语。