Being a Twin

I have a sister. We are twins. Being a twin， I feel that I am very lucky. In the modern families， most of the young are alone. [In most of the families now， there is only one child.] （1） No one has [Few have] （2） a sister or brother， and sometimes they feel lonely， but I do not， as my sister and I can express our feelings and thoughts to each other freely.

　　We look exactly the same. So someone always mistakes [people always mistake] （3） me for my sister. Usually I won't tell him/her[them] （4） that he/she has [they have] （5） made a mistake. I've been used to this. In the classroom， there is a certain distance between our seats so that teachers can remember where either of us sits in order to tell us from each other.

　　We seem to be the same not only in appearance but also in disposition （气质）。 I like what she likes and hate what she hates. We both like music， sports， reading and working. Sometimes， we could [can] （6） do the same thing at the same time without a prior consultation （事先商量）， which is called a heart-to-heart linking. However， we have some differences between us. For example， she says Beijing Opera （京剧） is very wonderful while I am not able to hear only a word in Beijing Opera [can hardly appreciate a single line in Beijing Opera] （7）。 She likes sweets while I hate sweet food very much.

　　We are all sanguine （乐观） [both hopeful] （8） and lively. If we meet something that is not pleasant， we will forget it in a short time. If we have failed to do something， we always say that where there is a will， there is a way. If one of us has no good results in the exams， the other will encourage her.

　　I am sure we are very happy as we are twins. We will go on our way of life shoulder to shoulder for ever.

　　湖北省安陆一中高二（3）班 张俐

　　评 语

　　文章从双胞胎姐妹之间的共同点和不同点着手进行了有趣的描写，从句子结构和词语运用来看，作者有较好的英语基础。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下：

　　（1）原文中国式英语味道较重，且modern一词用得有些过头。

　　（2）原文no one似乎太绝对，改为few，还可与后面的they呼应。

　　（3）、（4）、（5）把someone改为people不仅更自然，而且可以避免后面使用him/her的尴尬。

　　（6）这里不必用过去时。

　　（7）原文有中国式英语之嫌，故改之。

　　（8）表示“两人都”，用both，且sanguine这词用得太深。